Before we can process it further, we would however ask for the following modifications:
Reincarnation History: While some basics are there, we would like to see about 2 more paragraphs. Just flesh out the bare bones that are there, for example by adding details on what she's doing in university (which seems to be where she is right now?) and what exactly you mean by "play".
Reincarnation differences: Like the History section, while some basics are there we would appreciate it if you could flesh out what is there and expand on the ideas you had. We also do require that there be at least three or four different ways in which the reincarnation personality differs from the preincarnation personality. As it is now, at its core the only real difference between the two is that Emily is more mature than Remilia.
Abilities: Please bullet point this section! Formatting issue aside, please be aware that we will not allow you to echo any power, ability or knowledge that is not explicitly named in this section, so be thorough and detailed.
First Echo: Please complete this, it seems like whatever you wrote was accidentally deleted before posting.
Samples: We would like to ask for a new and a bit longer first-person sample. As it is now there isn't enough meat to it to judge it.
We apologize for the inconvenience and hope to hear back from you soon!
Revisions
Before we can process it further, we would however ask for the following modifications:
We also do require that there be at least three or four different ways in which the reincarnation personality differs from the preincarnation personality. As it is now, at its core the only real difference between the two is that Emily is more mature than Remilia.
Formatting issue aside, please be aware that we will not allow you to echo any power, ability or knowledge that is not explicitly named in this section, so be thorough and detailed.
We apologize for the inconvenience and hope to hear back from you soon!