Thanks for the revisions, there's been a lot of improvement!
We'd just like to see two more things:
Preincarnation History Thanks for the newly added parts to the History section! It reads and flows through the bulk of the game's plot now. We just have one more thing to ask for: Could you please include whether or not Tifa was in the party at the time Sephiroth killed Aerith? Thank you!
Reincarnation history There's still a bit of a sadness with the reincarnation history. Please instead of just adding onto it, rework it with the following changes in mind: 1. Please tell us the name and location of the town (or at the very least the country) where all those childhood stories took place and where she grew up. It seems that it was an important place to her and it also defines what (immigrant?) ethnicity she is, so it would be important for you to have it figured out for the game. 2. As the history sounds now, she is living in London. This would be a problem as per the FAQ, "[c]haracters must currently be living or long-term staying in Mossgate, England, the primary setting of the game", as echoes and access to the network aren't active outside of the boundaries of Mossgate which does not border London. For the location of the Mossgate echo boundary in relation to London, which it does not border, please refer to the map at the top of the locations page (clicking the map will lead you to a bigger version of the map, London is in the top left corner, Mossgate is at the bottom right). Please write a quick blurb for us describing when and why she moved to Mossgate!
Almost there!
We'd just like to see two more things:
Preincarnation History
Thanks for the newly added parts to the History section! It reads and flows through the bulk of the game's plot now. We just have one more thing to ask for: Could you please include whether or not Tifa was in the party at the time Sephiroth killed Aerith? Thank you!
Reincarnation history
There's still a bit of a sadness with the reincarnation history. Please instead of just adding onto it, rework it with the following changes in mind:
1. Please tell us the name and location of the town (or at the very least the country) where all those childhood stories took place and where she grew up. It seems that it was an important place to her and it also defines what (immigrant?) ethnicity she is, so it would be important for you to have it figured out for the game.
2. As the history sounds now, she is living in London. This would be a problem as per the FAQ, "[c]haracters must currently be living or long-term staying in Mossgate, England, the primary setting of the game", as echoes and access to the network aren't active outside of the boundaries of Mossgate which does not border London. For the location of the Mossgate echo boundary in relation to London, which it does not border, please refer to the map at the top of the locations page (clicking the map will lead you to a bigger version of the map, London is in the top left corner, Mossgate is at the bottom right).
Please write a quick blurb for us describing when and why she moved to Mossgate!